Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people regard that many worldwide events
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as the Olympic
Game
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or the football World Cup are the best
way
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to calm down every stress
from
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of
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country's relationship
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the country's relationship
and safely promote the national pride. Personally, I am convinced
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is true because when people involve
to
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in
these physical activities, they
also
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create the environment for competition and bring everyone closer and even emerge the national pride from each person. These may be the main reasons for the above opinion.
Firstly
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,
regarding to the
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regarding the first
first
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reason, competitive environment is always made by every
games
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game
, especially sporting occasions because most of kinds of sport require their competitors have to compete with the others. In the past, many ancient kingdoms used to apply
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instead
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of activating battles in order to reduce the number
of death people
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of death in people
. Olympic
Game
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,
for instance
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, which was born many years ago in Greece, now is the term for every athletes define themselves. Every
competitors
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competitor
repersent
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represents
represent
to
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for
in
the
country
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participating in any type of sport listed in the
Game
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and gaining the medal
to
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for
their
country
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. I think
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is quite a good
way
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to improve themselves and the relationship between nations as well.
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, the other reason is
this
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brings everyone and every nation together. The other
ingredent
a component of a mixture or compound
ingredient
ingredients
of
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in
these kind of occasions
are
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is
the audience. They are similar to the athletes because they perhaps come from many different
places but
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places, but
when
then
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join in the event, they select a side which is mostly their home team, representing their nation as well.
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, the football World Cup is the great occasion for
every one
all people
everyone
to show how proud they are of their team and their
country
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. When they watch sports and encourage their side with the honest spirit,
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gradually emerge
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gradually emerging
gradually emerges
the national pride
inside
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in
them.
Thus
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, many patriotic emotions will be released in a safe
way
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.
In addition
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, football is well-known as the king of sports due to 2 reasons, one is
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motivate nations take part in the
game
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and the other one is
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promote member nations. When a national team
become
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becomes
a champion, gaining a kind of
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
cup, their
country
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also benefit
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also benefits
has also benefited
has also benefitted
is also benefiting
by increasing revenue in tourism, economy and so on.
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why many people rushing up to these kind of activity rather than creating the wars. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I believe that international events
such
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as the World Cup, the Euro Cup or the Olymic
Game
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are
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is
the best
way
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to ease the tension of international relationship of each
country
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and promote their nations. They usually state that we will be
strong
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stronger
if we stay together.
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, let us use
this
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great tool, the sport, so as to connect the world.
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