Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
For the time being,
a
commercial has been growing and broadening Correct article usage
apply
influence
, Correct pronoun usage
its influence
due to
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have
been changing technologies and increasing Change the verb form
having
sell
which Replace the word
sales
have
a positive impact on the income of Change the verb form
has
companies
. Use synonyms
However
, society throughout Linking Words
years
has been noticing degradation among consumers, because they more time have been choosing things imposed by advertising and almost lost their own opinion. Correct article usage
the years
Overall
, I think we could avoid negative effects and get more positive for everybody if use Linking Words
advertisement
carefully.
Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
Thus
, in the Linking Words
beginning
the advertisement was developed with Add a comma
beginning,
the
good aims inasmuch as Correct article usage
apply
advertising
clip should give consumers wide options to choice. Correct article usage
the advertising
Besides
, via Linking Words
such
video Linking Words
companies
could make highly competitive conditions among one-type Use synonyms
products
. Now an advertisement around us Use synonyms
Add a missing verb
are permanently
permanently
because Change the word
permanent
gets
access to more gadgets Correct subject-verb agreement
get
such
as the internet, a billboard, Linking Words
the
TV and so on. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, new Linking Words
products
and Use synonyms
companies
get more chances to represent them for better selling.
Use synonyms
However
, throughout Linking Words
years
clip makers have been finding Correct article usage
the years
out
methods Change preposition
apply
manipulate
Fix the infinitive
to manipulate
of
an audience by repeatedly Change preposition
apply
represents
, Wrong verb form
representing
repeat
words, or, even, Wrong verb form
repeating
implement
some technology that impairs on psychology of consumers. Wrong verb form
implementing
For example
, early in the century had shown much news about Linking Words
a
twenty-fifth of frame that Correct article usage
the
imposed
people to buy Verb problem
forced
this
product Linking Words
then
throughout plenty of years different Linking Words
source
to Fix the agreement mistake
sources
try denied
Wrong verb form
deny
this
information. Linking Words
Moreover
, many advertisements show standards of beauty via new creams or other Linking Words
products
that make women more beautiful or help Use synonyms
lose
weight Correct pronoun usage
them lose
that
leads to doubt about their appearance. Correct pronoun usage
which
Besides
, many Linking Words
companies
via advertising have been selling Use synonyms
not quality
Correct your spelling
low-quality
products
because Use synonyms
of
a good clip Change preposition
apply
outweigh
high quality in our time. Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
Thus
, a good start turns Linking Words
to
something ambiguous.
Change preposition
into
To sum up
, I believe advertising Linking Words
as
good as other methods of product Add a missing verb
is as
promotions
. Fix the agreement mistake
promotion
However
, necessary to restrict using Linking Words
such
videos and turn them Linking Words
to
a style Change preposition
into
that is
more comparative than attractive and intrusive.Linking Words
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task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more clearly and in more depth. Make sure to elaborate on both positive economic effects and negative social effects in a balanced manner.
task achievement
It would be beneficial to use more precise vocabulary and to include specific examples to support your points, which would strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs smoothly transition from one idea to the next, maintaining a clear line of reasoning throughout your essay.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, outlining the issues and expressing your own opinion effectively.
task achievement
Your understanding of the dual nature of advertising impacts — both economic and social — is apparent.