You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

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Dear Sir, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to inform you that I will be unavailable to attend the evening classes from next week
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my work commitments. I am Sam, and a part-time student at Humber College, North campus. Currently, I am enrolled in an entrepreneurship program to learn about business tactics
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and ideas to start a small-scale business independently. Previously, I was a regular team member of the A&W restaurant. Recently, the management has entrusted me with new responsibilities
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and has promoted me to the new position of Supervisor. With
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new role, I have to lead a team, assigning them daily tasks, and ensuring
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productivity and profitability are at optimal levels.
Due to
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this
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change in my work schedule, I will not be able to attend classes. I humbly request
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help with the withdrawal procedure of
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course, or if it is possible,
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I would be happy to attend online sessions. I would be grateful to you. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
Score: 7. Make the first line say that you must stop the course, not only miss classes from next week. This is more clear.
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Say if you want to leave the course now, join online classes, or move to a later course. Pick one main wish.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 7. Some long sentences have too many ideas. Use shorter sentences to make your meaning more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Link the last two parts more clearly. For example: “For this reason, I cannot attend the evening classes.”
coherence and cohesion
The part about what you study is useful, but it can be shorter. Give more space to your request for help.
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You cover all three parts: your work change, why you cannot come, and what you want to do.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. The order is easy to follow.
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The greeting and closing are right for a formal letter: “Dear Sir” and “Yours faithfully.”
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time employment
  • part-time evening course
  • increased workload
  • longer working hours
  • urgent deadlines
  • work commitments
  • attend classes regularly
  • keep up with coursework
  • complete assignments on time
  • poor attendance
  • temporary leave
  • defer my studies
  • resume the course
  • next available intake
  • transfer to another class
  • online learning option
  • refund for the remaining fees
  • I sincerely apologise for the inconvenience
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