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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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With the advance of technology and the Internet, employees have a chance to work in different places which is suitable
such
 as at
home
 . In
m
Accept space
.
y opinion,
this
 change is a positive development in working more productively.
First
 of all, it depends on the company current situation to consider whether to allow employees to work at
home
.
For instance
, designer or coder need varied environment where they can open their minds and help them to improve creative thinking. In the meanwhile, the workplace at companies and corporations is too strict and noisy for them.
Furthermore
, the widespread of the Internet is
also
 a benefit. Employees can discuss and perform works via telecommuting. Working at
home
also
help them
Suggestion
also helps
has also helped
 to arrange their timetable and save a plenty of hidden money. These include the car purchasing, fuel cost, park cost...
In contrast
, some people claim that working in the companies is more productive. We are always surrounded around people, but at
home
, employees are likely to be alone.
This
 may lead to a lack of interaction.
Moreover
, in the companies, they are always being led or instructed if they have any questions or problems. And the most important thing is the feeling of being over comfortable at
home
, we almost do not focus on the assignment and work poorly. In conclusion,
Although
this
 development may have, the pros and cons, sides, it is still a positive change for humans in general and for employees.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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