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Band 6.5

Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Providing a basic
health
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care
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 without charge is a responsibility of individual
countriescountry
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countries country
. As the population has grown by a leap, it is highly impossible to serve expensive treatments to their citizen's with free of cost. I agree with the option of basic
health
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care
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 support by the
government
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 is essential.
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, Individual ought to own the costly expenses, medical
care
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 of themselves.
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, it is inevitable that every
country
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 has to arrange basic
health
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care
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 for free of cost to their
country
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 citizen's because they are paying taxes which has to utilise for their own
health
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.
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, paying money for small illness would charge more money from the pocket. If the
government
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 provides basic
health
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care
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 for free, public can lead a better life and
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 it encourages many refugees to migrate to the
country
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 as
health
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 is the primary concern, which everyone look while planning to a new
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.
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,
country
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 economy boost dramatically.
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,
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government
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 can assist basic
health
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care
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 with no charge, it is impossible borne costly surgeries.
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, a surgery for a brain, which costs 5000 dollars would be a huge burden for the authorities to manage from taxes and other revenue.
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, if a person is in critical situation and do not have sufficient money for his
health
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then
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government
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 should support to mitigate the problem.
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It's
 a boon for people who are below poverty level. In conclusion, I pen down, saying that, it is not
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country
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a country
 who has to take
care
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 of all the
health
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care
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care, health
health
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care
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 and individuals have to take
care
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 of their
health
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 and severe
health
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 issues in emergency situations. Based on the individual income,
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country
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countries
the country
 should support partially when it's really needed.
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