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Do you agree that the advantages car bring overweigh the disadvantage.

#car #overweigh
In the modern era, using a
car
 with the people has become very common all over the world. At present, more and more people buy cars than in the past.
Although
 I think that it maintains very difficult yet I strongly believe that bringing a
car
 has more advantages than the disadvantages. The upcoming paragraph will examine the advantages and some disadvantages. To start with, there is a plethora of benefits of owning a
car
.
First
 of all, bringing a
car
 has more comfortable, as we can go anywhere and anytime if we have a
car
. We can read books, listen music, playing with kids, which is not possible in the public transportation.
Therefore
, people tend to buy owning a personal
car
.
Secondly
, it provides security as well as freedom. To illustrate, we can go to our destination where we want to go while travelling, owning
a
Suggestion
an
 automobile is cheaper than other modes of transportation. It saves our time and money, which will be very beneficial for the people and they can make friends while the travelling. So it is very comfortable and freedom as well as security for the people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantages
  • disadvantage
  • convenience
  • mobility
  • time-saving
  • independence
  • freedom
  • economic benefits
  • social status
  • perception
  • environmental impact
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