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In many countries ,small number of people earn extremely high salaries.some people bielive that th is is a good for your country, but other think that goverment should not allow salaries above certain level.discuss both you and give your opinion.

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It
 is
notice to be that
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to be noticed that
noticed to be that
noticeable to be that
notified to be that
noticing to be that
money
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 is
important part
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an important part
 of our life.These days life is impossible without
money
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.The people earn a take
the high
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higher
the highest
the higher
 salaries it is good for our
economy
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economy, however
however
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 other say
government
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 not allow above the certain level
.
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.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would discuss about both my views and ideas.
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firstly
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Firstly
, the more small people a earn a big
wages
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wage
 because they increase the
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 with big companies.
Moreover
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,
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,
many people have long time work in place after company
give
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gives
 the bounces to employer end of
year
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the year
 and festivals.
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similarly
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Similarly
,
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,
mostly rich people have more investment
money
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 in property and
banks
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banks, for
for instance
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,
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,
the traders in investment banks are who save millions
dollars
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dollar
 trade
to
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for
by
 using in the
proffession
the body of people in a learned occupation
profession
professions
.
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furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
,
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,
other reasons of
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should not pay
salary
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salaries
a salary
 to
difference
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differing
different
differentiate
 levels because
government
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spend
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spends
money
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 in public places as well as using
country
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 growing which is
more benfit
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more beneficial
more benefit
 for
economy
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the economy
.
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.
undoubtedly
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Undoubtedly
,
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,
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government
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the government
 should control salary because they
using
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are using
use
money
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 on some public places
.
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.
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for
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For
 example
,
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,
 they
constuction
the act of constructing something
construction
 museum and public parks which
is
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are
benfit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
for
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of
country
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 people To sum up,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 pen down say, many countries employer take good salaries meanwhile they have
achieving
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achieved
good work
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a good work
 for our
country
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likewise
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government
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 no give the high salary because they more spending
money
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country
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 growth.

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