In many countries ,small number of people earn extremely high salaries.some people bielive that th is is a good for your country, but other think that goverment should not allow salaries above certain level.discuss both you and give your opinion.

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notice to be that

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to be noticed that

noticed to be that

noticeable to be that

notified to be that

noticing to be that

money

important part

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an important part

of our life.These days life is impossible without

money

.The people earn a take

the high

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higher

the highest

the higher

salaries it is good for our

economy

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economy, however

however

other say

government

not allow above the certain level

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would discuss about both my views and ideas.

firstly

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Firstly

, the more small people a earn a big

wages

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wage

because they increase the

bussiness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

business

with big companies.

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many people have long time work in place after company

give

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gives

the bounces to employer end of

year

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the year

and festivals.

similarly

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Similarly

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mostly rich people have more investment

money

in property and

banks

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banks, for

for instance

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the traders in investment banks are who save millions

dollars

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dollar

trade

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for

using in the

proffession

the body of people in a learned occupation

profession

professions

furthermore

in addition

Furthermore

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other reasons of

goverment

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

should not pay

salary

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salaries

a salary

difference

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differing

different

differentiate

levels because

government

spend

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spends

money

in public places as well as using

country

growing which is

more benfit

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more beneficial

more benefit

for

economy

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the economy

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undoubtedly

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Undoubtedly

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government

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the government

should control salary because they

using

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are using

use

money

on some public places

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for

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For

example

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they

constuction

the act of constructing something

construction

museum and public parks which

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are

benfit

financial assistance in time of need

benefit

for

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country

people To sum up,

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pen down say, many countries employer take good salaries meanwhile they have

achieving

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achieved

good work

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a good work

for our

country

likewise

government

no give the high salary because they more spending

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Thu Mar 19 2020

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In many countries ,small number of people earn extremely high salaries.some people bielive that th is is a good for your country, but other think that goverment should not allow salaries above certain level.discuss both you and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role.

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