In many countries ,small number of people earn extremely high salaries.some people bielive that th is is a good for your country, but other think that goverment should not allow salaries above certain level.discuss both you and give your opinion.

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notice to be that

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to be noticed that

noticed to be that

noticeable to be that

notified to be that

noticing to be that

money

important part

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an important part

of our life.These days life is impossible without

money

.The people earn a take

the high

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higher

the highest

the higher

salaries it is good for our

economy

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economy, however

however

other say

government

not allow above the certain level

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would discuss about both my views and ideas.

firstly

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Firstly

, the more small people a earn a big

wages

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wage

because they increase the

bussiness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

business

with big companies.

Moreover

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many people have long time work in place after company

give

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gives

the bounces to employer end of

year

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the year

and festivals.

similarly

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Similarly

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mostly rich people have more investment

money

in property and

banks

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banks, for

for instance

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the traders in investment banks are who save millions

dollars

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dollar

trade

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for

using in the

proffession

the body of people in a learned occupation

profession

professions

furthermore

in addition

Furthermore

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other reasons of

goverment

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

should not pay

salary

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salaries

a salary

difference

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differing

different

differentiate

levels because

government

spend

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spends

money

in public places as well as using

country

growing which is

more benfit

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more beneficial

more benefit

for

economy

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the economy

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undoubtedly

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Undoubtedly

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government

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the government

should control salary because they

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are using

use

money

on some public places

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for

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For

example

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they

constuction

the act of constructing something

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museum and public parks which

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benfit

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benefit

for

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country

people To sum up,

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pen down say, many countries employer take good salaries meanwhile they have

achieving

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good work

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a good work

for our

country

likewise

government

no give the high salary because they more spending

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In many countries ,small number of people earn extremely high salaries.some people bielive that th is is a good for your country, but other think that goverment should not allow salaries above certain level.discuss both you and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Atomic energy ( Nuclear power )is becoming more and more popular energy source. However, some people argue that nuclear power puts life on the Earth to danger Discuss both view and give your opinion?

Task 2 Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think this is a positive or a negative development ?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.