Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Presently,
a
commercial has been growing and broadening its influence Correct article usage
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due to
changing technologies and increasing sales that have a positive impact on the income of companies
. However
, society throughout the years has been noticing degradation among consumers, because more and more often they choose things imposed by advertising and almost lost
their own opinion. Wrong verb form
lose
Overall
, I think we could avoid negative effects and get more positive ones for everybody if use advertisement
carefully.
The advertisement was Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
initially
developed with the
good aims inasmuch as advertising clips should give consumers wide options Correct article usage
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for
to choice. Change preposition
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Besides
, via such
videos companies
can make highly competitive conditions among one-type products
. Now an advertisement surrounds around
us permanently, because Change preposition
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it
Correct pronoun usage
they
gets
access to more tools Correct subject-verb agreement
get
means
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such
as the internet, billboards, the TV and so on. Therefore
, new products
and companies
get more chances to represent them for higher sales.
However
, throughout years
clip makers have been finding Correct article usage
the years
out
methods to manipulate the audience by repeatedly rotating the same videos, repeating words, or, even, implementing some technology that impairs Change preposition
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on
the psychology of consumers. Change preposition
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For example
, early in the century, much news showed the technology of the twenty-fifth frame that forced people to buy the advertised product, then
throughout of
the Change preposition
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plenty
years different sources tried to deny Correct word choice
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this
information. Moreover
, many advertisements show standards of beauty via new creams or other products
that make women more beautiful or help lose
weight Correct pronoun usage
them lose
that
leads to doubt about their appearance. Correct pronoun usage
which
Besides
, many companies
via advertising have been selling not high quality
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high-quality
products
, because of
a good clip Change preposition
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outweigh
high quality in our time. Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
Thus
, a good start turns into something ambiguous.
To sum up
, I believe advertising as
effective as other methods of product Add a missing verb
is as
promotions
. Fix the agreement mistake
promotion
However
, IT IS necessary to restrict using such
videos and turn them into commercials a style that is
more informative than attractive and intrusive.Submitted by ilua.cavchuk on
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task achievement
Ensure you stay on topic and address all parts of the task. Your essay successfully discusses both the positive economic effects and negative social effects of advertising, providing a balanced view.
task achievement
Some ideas need further elaboration and clearer expression. Provide specific examples to strengthen your arguments and make your points more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph flows logically from one to the next. Work on developing clear topic sentences and more coherent transitions between ideas for better flow.
coherence and cohesion
Try to develop your main points with more detailed explanations and relevant examples. This will help improve the logical structuring of your argument.
introduction
The essay starts with a clear introduction that outlines the topic and establishes a balanced perspective.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates your opinion, providing a sense of closure.