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In many countries parents worry about the amount of time children spend watching TV and using the internet. What do you think are the causes of this , what solutions can you suggest

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Many modern children spend a great deal of
time
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 sitting in front of a
television
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 or a computer screen,
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 parents are getting more and more concerned.
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 is due to lack of other activities out of school and bad
time
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 management. Children are not engaged enough in out of school
activities
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activities, thus
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 they compensate by viewing
television
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.. Watching
TV
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 is a passive way to spend
time
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 with no social interaction.. Spending a lot of
time
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 in front of
computer
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a computer
 or
TV
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 screens limit’s a child
time
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 for other activities. That’s why it is crucial
t
in the direction of
to
 to organize free
time
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 in a more beneficial way. That being
said another
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said, another
 major cause is that parents do not set reasonable limits for their children.
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 might be due to intensity of modern life, parents are often too busy to supervise their children properly. For many parents, it is just easier to turn on the
television
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 than to actually be involved in the lives of their children.
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result they
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result, they
 spend a large amount of their free
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 watching
TV
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 programs and sometimes neglecting their homework. There are two effective solutions to tackle
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 issue.
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Firstly parents
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Firstly, parents
 should make sure their children are involved in other activities. Physical exercise and playing with other children are essential for healthy development.
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It's
 important to plan other fun activities, so the child has choices
instead
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 of screen
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.
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Secondly parents
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Secondly, parents
 and children should agree to a limit
of
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on
television
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time
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. If its
nry
(of actions or states) slightly short of or not quite accomplished; all but
nearly
TV
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/s and computers should be removed from the child bedroom. Conclusively, using computers and viewing
television
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 over an extensive period of
time
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 among children comes
as a result
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 of having no other thing to do and using
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 ineffectively
.
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 Parents should never leave
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 issue unattended, but start taking precautions
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 as limiting their screen
time
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 and substitute the latter with more outdoor activities.

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