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Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different views about whether paying taxes
is
Suggestion
are
 the only responsibility that citizens should fulfil. While I admit that taxes undoubtedly do contribute significantly to society, I think that other social commitments are equally important. The argument in favour of the idea that paying tax is enough may involve the recognition that people already fulfil their responsibilities through the tax system. They may take,
for instance
, living in a secure nation and enjoy high-quality education as granted, because it is the tax they paid that
finally
 becomes the salary for public servants,
such
 as polices and teachers.
Additionally
, some people may hold the view that they are too busy to serve the public, and it seems that paying taxes is the only way they can pay back to society. I believe
such
 an idea would be selfish and short-sighted, as even a small good like donating clothes to people in need can make a change to the world.
Moreover
, I would agree with those who believe that people have to take more social responsibilities. The main reason for
this
 view is that nations may occasionally be faced with unexpected emergency events like plague, and
this
 is the moment that citizens should take more responsibilities on their shoulders. To take Chinese people as an example, the idea of sacrificing one’s self for a greater, national goal is deeply-embedded in Chinese culture; and
thus
 they are willing to give up the so-called “physical freedom” and quarantine themselves at home in order to contain the spread of the virus. Without
such
 endeavour, there is no chance to count on that the authority could tack the problem alone. In conclusion,
although
 paying taxes are sure to be of vital importance in terms of the responsibility of citizenships, I believe that every effort should be made to serve society and build a better world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental
  • development
  • public services
  • social contract
  • financially support
  • civic responsibility
  • communal activities
  • engaged in the political process
  • advocating
  • enriches
  • actively participate
  • political process
  • less fortunate
  • environmentally responsible
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