Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones is disrupting social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

Some would argue that
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the revolution of technology and
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of electronic devices
such
as cell phones have adversely
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social communication.
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essay disagrees with
this
statement and believes that these changes have helped
people
stay connected with each other and
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valuable time spent on travelling to meet others. With the recent technological advancement telecommunication industry
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seen a
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improvement compared to other industries and humans are enjoying the benefits of it. Mobile phones and other related electronic devices have
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people
to make voice and video
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at a cheaper price which was not commercially available 20 years ago.
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it allows
people
to stay connected with one another from one country to another
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through
the use of
internet
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.
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instance
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I can speak to my family through
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WhatsApp
or
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whenever I go on a business visit to
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. The availability of electronic gadgets
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brought enormous merits to
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business communication.It has certainly made
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life easy at
work
and
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employees time which allows them to spend time with their family and friends.
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in my
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place
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people
have set up a
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
group and share all the important news related to the
work
and it gives the opportunity
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to
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work
to their team members when they are not present at the location. In conclusion,the advent of new technology in the form of various devices
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assisted
people
to socialise and to carry out their
work
and life conveniently compared to the early days.

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