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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss the two views and give your opinion

#people #history #two
Some folks deem that learning
history
 will assist us to know more regarding present time,
however some
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however, some
 socialists opine exactly opposite of
this
 notion. I
,
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,
will
also
 go with opposite perspective, which is described in
further
 paragraphs. Some societies of people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
 that
history
 plays
an
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a
 paramount role in carrying legacy from one generation to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
.It is the only instrumental tool to carry our
by gone
past events to be put aside
bygone
 culture to posterity.
Government
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The government
 is
also
 considering
history
 worth and
incuring
lacking affection or warm feeling
uncaring
incurring
 money on museums
,
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,
 architectural buildings
,
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,
and even till now, several education courses have been developed in India.
On the contrary
,
firstly
,
this
 is an upgraded era, socialists deem that to understand
present
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the present
,
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,
we should look into
technology
 alternatives to make our life easy going
,
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,
 despite of
technology
.
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.
Secondly
, we are residing in
21st century
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the 21st century
,
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,
where without
technology
,
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,
 there is no existence of life
,
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,
so it would be better to spend money on
technology
,
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,
inspite
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in spite
 of
history
. In my opinion, there should be a balance strategy regarding learning
history
.
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.
 So that,
history
 can have a good pace with our present. In conclusion
,
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,
 it is certain that it is a
technology
 driven world
,
Accept space
,
but concerned authorities should take appropriate steps to make
history
 necessary.

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