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People do not have enough money to pay internet. Should the governments provide free internet service to everyone?

Much like the telephone or the television, the
internet
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 has become an integral part of our day-to-day existence.
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, the
internet
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 is ex
pensive and
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expensive, and
this
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 prevents many people from accessing
this
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 limitless source of knowledge and information.
This
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,
however
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, doesn’t mean that the government should provide free
internet
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 to everyone. All over the
world
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, the number of people who use the
internet
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 is steadily on the rise and
that is
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 hardly surprising. The
internet
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 is a vast source of knowledge and entertainment. In fact, having a computer with an
internet
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 connection is a bit like having all the books in the
world
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 under one’s disposal. The
internet
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 is even better because it allows you to find the necessary information in a matter of seconds. The
internet
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also
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 provides entertainment and keeps us up-to-date with the latest happenings in the
world
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. And
hence
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 one cannot underestimate the importance of
in
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ternet.
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the internet
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, saying that the government should provide free
internet
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 to everyone is kind of absurd. In a
world
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 where we have to pay for basic necessities like food and medicine, demanding that the
internet
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 should be free is a bit ridiculous. It is a useful se
rvice but f
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service, but
or many people there are far more pressing needs.
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, millions of people across the
world
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 still have no access to safe drinking water or electricity. Tens of thousands of people are homeless. A lot of them haven’t even heard about the
internet
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. What they need are the basic necessities of life and not free
internet
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. After analysing the si
tuation it i
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situation, it
s not hard to see that the basic necessities of life are far more important than the
internet
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. Of course, the
internet
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 is useful, but it is not indispensable. And
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 the governments should use their resources to provide the basic amenities rather than giving free
internet
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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