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Nowadays a few people take their family with them to abroad whenever they go for a Business trip. What are the advantages and disadvantages on them and on their family?

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In the salad days of the millennium, it is argued by some people that the daily articles on media associated with pictures are more powerful than news in words. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion and
this
 essay will state the reasons for my view about daily articles. The most compelling reason for holding my view is that the news
information
 in the form of pictures is an effective way of presenting the
information
 to the citizens.
This
 is because
information
's are easy to understand by the people from younger to older generations. The Asian countries are a prime example where 40 % of the population is aged between 65 to 95 years old have difficulties in reading and listening to the news.
As a result
,
this
 will increase peoples to know more about the happening's around the world. Another reason for my position is the cost of printing paper is increasing globally. The articles are developed by few process
such
 as gathering news, proof reading, editing and printing. Despite, we can use cartoon characters as a representative
instead
 of words.
However
, by
this
 way companies are able to control the paper production cost and increase the paper circulation to reach more number of people. A final reason in support of my viewpoint is that, the
information
 with pictures which is telecasted in multimedia platform improves the viewer ship worldwide.
This
 is
also
 another way for advertising companies in order to increase their revenues. In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that new stories published with images are beneficial for countries.
Furthermore
, local companies would be able to save costs and it is recommended that companies around the world should adapt
this
 form of image publish.
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