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Band 7.5

You stayed at a friend's house while he/she was away. There was a prob- lem with a kitchen appliance. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain · how you liked staying at his/her house · what the problem with the kitchen appliance was · what you did to solve the problem Write about 150 words in an appropriate format and style. You can use this page for any rough work

Dear Mr Jackson, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to thank you sincerely for allowing me to stay at your house
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 you were away. I truly enjoyed my time there, as the house was comfortable, well organised, and made me feel completely at home. Unfortunately, I encountered a problem with the kitchen dishwasher during my stay. It suddenly stopped working and began leaking water onto the floor
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 I was using it, which caused some inconvenience. To resolve the issue, I immediately turned off the appliance and cleaned up the water to prevent any damage. I
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 contacted a local repair service,
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 identified a faulty hose and fixed it the same day. I covered the repair cost and left the receipt on the kitchen table for your reference. Once again, thank you for your generosity and trust. I truly appreciated your hospitality. Yours sincerely, Nurali

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task response
The letter covers all the needed points well. Try to end with a short line of thanks or a future note to add warmth.
coherence and cohesion
Keep ideas clear by making one main idea in each paragraph and begin a new paragraph for a new idea.
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Polite and kind tone throughout.
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Good flow from problem to action to result.
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Correct letter format with greeting and closing.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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