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Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree?

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Air
pollution
 has now become a major health hazard for all countries. While some people support that restricting
air
 traffic is the only solution to curtail
pollution
 of
air
, others maintain that other methods should be implemented to control
air
pollution
. The rapid growth of manufacturing and the automotive industry was the major development of
last twenty years
Suggestion
the last twenty years
.
This
 trend has undoubtedly created more and more factories across the world, which has now become the major source of
pollution
 of environment and
air
.
Moreover
, the number of cars and trucks on the streets have multiplied exponentially over the past decade.
However
, studies show that number of
air
 planes used by global airline industry has not increased. So, even if tough restrictions are imposed on
air
travel
,
air
pollution
 cannot be prevented by that measure. Despite the impracticality of banning
air
travel
, some people think that
air
pollution
 can be eliminated by grounding all the
air
 planes. What they don't understand is that the aeronautical fuel is one of the most efficient fuel in the world. Combustion of these fuels doesn't create any pollutants during
air
travel
. Studies show that only one percent of
air
pollution
 is created by
air
 traffic. As
air
travel
 is not a significant source of
air
pollution
, it should not be restricted. To conclude,
this
 essay discussed why the restriction of
air
travel
 cannot prevent
air
pollution
. In my opinion,
air
 planes are not a major source of
air
pollution
 and,
therefore
air
 traffic need not be restricted to keep the
air
 clean.

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