Please state your reasons for wishing to undertake this programme?

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In my final year at Hanoi-Amsterdam High School, by working on a science project to compete in the Intel International Science and Engineering Fair, I had a chance to conduct

hand

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hands

-on experiments on filtering bacteria in water and

thus

gradually grew my passion for biology and health sciences. Later, while attending Hanoi University of Pharmacy, I had

also

gained more knowledge in genetics, biotechnology, manufacturing processes and regulations that helped shape my aim of joining the biopharmaceutical

industry

;

however

, I have not yet had the opportunity to pursue that interest.

Although

working outside the biopharmaceutical

industry

field after

graduated

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graduating

, I still keep updating biotechnology and pharmaceutical information, as well as learn more about programming to

further

apply in engineering work. After carefully researched and prepared, I am confident that attending a Master’s program in Biopharmaceutical Engineering at University College Dublin would help me to fill the gap of experiences and knowledge in

this

specialized field. Nowadays, the rising demands in

biopharmaceuticals

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Biopharmaceuticals

like vaccines, antibodies, gene therapies and so on are really appealing to me, since I always want to use my abilities to enhance the manufacturing processes of

such

products.

Moreover

, thanks to the development of automation,

software solutions

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software, solutions

and internet of things, the biopharmaceutical

industry

is changing faster than ever.

Therefore

, in the

5 years, I aim at being an expert in automated control system to

production

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produce

. I want to utilize effectively the advanced technologies to monitor,

analyze

consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

analyse

and control the manufacturing processes. With the help of the Master in Biopharmaceutical Engineering program as well as the large job opportunities in Ireland pharmaceutical

industry

, I hope that I would be able to gain more knowledge and skills to achieve my goals, and later to come back to Vietnam and build a strong company in

this

high technology sector.

Sat Mar 21 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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