Some people believe they should keep all they money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

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Government

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The government

generates income by collecting

legal

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legal, tax

tax

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from its citizen.

However

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, certain group of taxpayers commented that we should save our hard-earned

money

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instead

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of paying

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tax

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taxes

. In

this

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essay, I will discuss what are the reasons that I totally agreed to pay

tax

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Firstly

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, without

money

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, we do not have the power to buy tangible things which can provide us with comfortable livings. But it is sad to see each

month

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month, money

money

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that we have put so much effort into and portion of it has deducted by

tax

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council

a lawyer who pleads cases in court

counsel

. As the family disposable income has

shrinked

decrease in size, range, or extent

shrunk

shrank

, he has less saving in

bank

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the bank

. It is arguable why some believe by keeping more

money

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can lead to happy family life.

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, dad could bring the whole family to a vacation where they able to build up

bond

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a bond

the bond

within each other but the funds

has gone

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have gone

had gone

government

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the government

. Even though part of the income is paying

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tax

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taxes

, it has brought more benefits to us. Benefits like public facilities, quality education and affordable healthcare need funds to improve.

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for instance

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outbreak like Covid-19 is devastating if our national funds is not sufficient, there will be more

distratrous

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effect

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effectively

affecting us. The duty to submit

tax

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is very important in

this

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case, imagine without

fund which

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fund, which

our hospital has total lack of Doctors, facilities, testing equipments and ambulances to cope with. The total number of

death

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deaths

would have been escalated.

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that, as poor road facilities will

also

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hamper the effort to save those in needs during the outbreak,

ambulance

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an ambulance

the ambulance

will need to take more time to

reach to the hospital

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reach the hospital

. To conclude, it is important to fund the country that will bring save and convenient living space to us even if we less purchasing power at the end of the month. As some

is still concerning

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is still concerned

about their

money

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should put to other use rather than paying

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tax

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taxes

, we can suggest to the government to have different taxing system

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which the rich pay more, rather than one blanket that cover all.

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Topic Vocabulary:

contribute
welfare
public services
progressive taxation
distribution of wealth
civic duty
social cohesion
tax evasion
economic disparities
social unrest
individual rights
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