Some people believe they should keep all they money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

Government
Suggestion
The government
generates income by collecting
legal
Accept comma addition
legal, tax
tax
from its citizen.
However
, certain group of taxpayers commented that we should save our hard-earned
money
instead
of paying
tax
Suggestion
taxes
. In
this
essay, I will discuss what are the reasons that I totally agreed to pay
tax
.
Firstly
, without
money
, we do not have the power to buy tangible things which can provide us with comfortable livings. But it is sad to see each
month
Accept comma addition
month, money
money
that we have put so much effort into and portion of it has deducted by
tax
council
a lawyer who pleads cases in court
counsel
. As the family disposable income has
shrinked
decrease in size, range, or extent
shrunk
shrank
, he has less saving in
bank
Suggestion
the bank
. It is arguable why some believe by keeping more
money
can lead to happy family life.
For example
, dad could bring the whole family to a vacation where they able to build up
bond
Suggestion
a bond
the bond
within each other but the funds
has gone
Suggestion
have gone
had gone
to
government
Suggestion
the government
.  Even though part of the income is paying
tax
Suggestion
taxes
, it has brought more benefits to us. Benefits like public facilities, quality education and affordable healthcare need funds to improve.
Conversely
,
for instance
,
a
Suggestion
an
outbreak like Covid-19 is devastating if our national funds is not sufficient, there will be more
distratrous
effect
Suggestion
effectively
affecting us. The duty to submit
tax
is very important in
this
case, imagine without
fund which
Accept comma addition
fund, which
our hospital has total lack of Doctors, facilities, testing equipments and ambulances to cope with. The total number of
death
Suggestion
deaths
would have been escalated.
Besides
that, as poor road facilities will
also
hamper the effort to save those in needs during the outbreak,
ambulance
Suggestion
an ambulance
the ambulance
will need to take more time to
reach to the hospital
Suggestion
reach the hospital
. To conclude, it is important to fund the country that will bring save and convenient living space to us even if we less purchasing power at the end of the month. As some
is still concerning
Suggestion
is still concerned
about their
money
should put to other use rather than paying
tax
Suggestion
taxes
, we can suggest to the government to have different taxing system
,
Accept space
,
which the rich pay more, rather than one blanket that cover all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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