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Many people believe that money is one of the most important factors in a person's happiness. To what extent do you agree

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To some people, financial status is one of the primary principles in life to stay happy. I agree that
money
 plays a big role in living in a better l
ifestyle but,
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lifestyle, but
 at the same
time
, I believe that there are other more important factors as well. There’s no doubt that
money
 is required to f
ulfill
put in effect
fulfil
our basic needs like shelter, clothes and food. A rich
person
 who has
money
 to cover all these necessities may seem to be h
appy but
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happy, but
it doesn’t mean that a poor
person
 who can’t afford these things is not happy. One, who is striving to earn more and more
money
 being busy with work and travelling for business can rarely spend his
time
 in a circle of their family. And
this
 unhealthy tendency makes h
appy neither
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happy, neither
him nor his family. When it comes to p
oor
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a poor person
the poor person
poor people
person
, even if he earns less
money
, he is able to spend more
time
 with his k
indered
similar in quality or character
kindred
.
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.
This
 kind of families t
end
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tends
 to be more close and kind to each other, which is an essential part of
happiness
.
On the other hand
, being socially active plays not less important role in reaching
happiness
. There are many people suffering from loneliness and depression. When people are so busy with earning
money
 that don’t have
time
 to talk to anyone to share their thoughts and feelings
.
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.
In
this
 way, they lose their place in social life and one key to
happiness
. Because interacting with someone whom we love gives us internal
happiness
 and it is very pleasant to know that we have someone who cares for us. As another significant factor of
happiness
 one should consider own health of course. Sometimes having a great amount of
money
 can’t provide a
person
 with health and it seems that being poor but completely healthy is a great
happiness
.
Therefore
, I would like to sum up with the idea that, having a lot of
money
 not always means to be happy. I strongly believe that being socially active and being healthy are more important indicators of
happiness
.

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