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With increasing use and development of new technology, many machines are now able to do the work which people used to perform . what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Nowadays, Using technology
is became
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is becoming
has become
becomes
 more and more popular and widely used in the
last
 few decades.
As a result
, lots of work which was done by human is now performed by
machine
. I consider that
this
 statement brings not only advantages but disadvantages as well. There are absolutely many advantages of
this
 situation.
Firstly
, accomplished by machines
are
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is
 much more efficient and accurate than performed by
human
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humans
a human
.
For example
, Printers are able to copy any material which written by hand for a several minutes. If human starts copying that materials by hand it really takes many hours. Without doubt, it is better to
spent
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spend
 time
in
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with
 family than to waste time on something that technology can do easily.
Secondly
, we know some machines which
can not
can not
cannot
 be used in daily life.
For instance
,
dish-washing
the act of washing dishes
dishwashing
 machines may waste
large amount
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large amounts
a large amount
 of electricity or
gaz
the state of matter distinguished from the solid and liquid states by: relatively low density and viscosity; relatively great expansion and contraction with changes in pressure and temperature; the ability to diffuse readily; and the spontaneous tendency to become distributed uniformly throughout any container
gas
. These days people prefer to utilize
dish-washing
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the dishwashing machine
dishwashing machine
machine
 because they are convenient and quick. It is clear that, in
machine
 can be used a lot electricity and water than washed by hand. It leads to
dramatically
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dramatic
 increase people expenditure.
Beside
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Besides
, if people completely rely on
machine
, they could lose the skill of working
.
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.
 From the discussion above, the
machine
 definitely brings visible convenience to our
life but
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life, but
 in many times
,
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,
 there are too costly.

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