Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are many different teams who plays

this

football. There

are dividing

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are divided

into 3

division

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divisions

division

one

division

two

and

division

three. Each

divisions

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division

have

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has

different skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the

one

who

teachs

impart skills or knowledge to

teaches

teach

touches

the player how to play. By playing football, there are many advantages and disadvantages.

Firstly

, the team can earn a

lot

of money. If we compare the income in

division

one

and

division

two

are really different. The

division

one

will get more than

division

two

Because as

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Because, as

we know, the team in

division

one

, they

shows

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show

to the people that they are able to play better than the others.

For example

: David Beckham (the player of

Manchaster

a city in northwestern England (30 miles to the east of Liverpool); heart of the most densely populated area of England

Manchester

United). He can earn for about £45.000 £50.000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK just got for about £11O.OOO/

year

Secondly

, they can get a

lot

of spectators which makes the income increased. In

one

match, they can earn for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s really high. For

one

ticket (VIP) it can cost us a

lot

of money. I think for about £100 or over.

That is

for

one

person. How if we count for a million person? There are

also

many disadvantages: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people come and give them flowers and

also

the clothes which

shown they

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shown, they

’re sad about that. There are other sport games like tennis. Tennis is

also

popular. In playing tennis there are

also

have advantages and disadvantages.

This

games

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game

shows how they against each other. The advantages are can earn a

lot

of money, can attract the spectators (audience). There are

also

have disadvantages of

this games

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this game

these games

for example

two

years ago, when Monica Sales and Steffi Graph are on the match. They play against each

other

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other, then one

then

one

of the Steffi’s

fan

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fans

can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots) Monica Sales. That makes Monica Sales have to stop the game. The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital. Because of that, it makes Monica Sales stopped from playing tennis for about a

year

. But now, she has started again. In my opinion, these

sport

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sports

can ease the international tensions and

also

can make death from

year

become increase. So, it is very dangerous.

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Prediction or recommendation

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In a nutshell
In general

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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

online education is better than physical learning. do you agree?

Art and music classes should not be mandatory at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society? Give reasons for your answer. Agree or Disagree Write at least 250 words.

Fewer people are reading books these days.Therefore, We should close all libraries and use the funds for something more urgent like healthcare. Do you agree or disagree?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?