Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Some people say that students who study at the same time
work
miss
Suggestion
missed
out on their education and are over and over on their feet. In
this
essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will explore some of the reasons as to why
this
happens and
also
provide some solutions.
Firstly
, students
work
to gain
work
experience
.
Presently students
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Presently, students
who complete their studies with
work
experience
are more marketable and more likely to be employed by potential employers.
For instance
, when seeking for a job position as a nurse it was an added advantage for me to secure the position due to prior
experience
.
Secondly
,
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,
working as a
students
Suggestion
student
provides a source of income. Students go through
challenges especially
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challenges, especially
when they have a family
for instance
to support.
This
prompts a student to
work
so as to meet the needs of their family.
On the other hand
, as a way to curb the highlighted causes, employers should offer to be flexible with job applications as students will reduce the much time they put into
work
and focus on studies. It is
also
important if the government could come in and offer loans as a way to assist students struggling to
work
to look after their families. In conclusion working to gain
experience
and earn an income has become an
intergral
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
integral
part of the students.
However
, to reduce the pressure
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
the students
incorperating
make into a whole or make part of a whole
incorporating
government to offer loans and employers providing
flexibilty
the property of being flexible; easily bent or shaped
flexibility
will ensure their studies are running with ease.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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