The chart below shows the result of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK

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The chart illustrates data on the reasons why UK students did not want to go to school based on the present studies.

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, the majority of the student's

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attributing to poor attendance in an institute is that

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both parents are working,

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of the children is less likely to be the problem.

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university is an important aspect

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children's learning and development. Most of the children said that they cannot be present

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school because their parents are both working which accounts for almost half of the percentage, at around 40%. Another reason is that

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students nowadays have a lack of discipline

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25% of the respondents.

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, both contributing factors

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as bullying and pressure from the peer group has approximately 15% of the total tally. The

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reason is that

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students felt that

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of their parents and family may be a contributing factor which attributes

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only 5%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

162 words

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The chart below shows the result of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK

Some people think that the government should offer financial support and care to old people, while others think people should save money for their future life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It can be difficult for small local shops to compete with large supermarkets and with on-line shops. How does this affect local communities? What could be done to improve this situation?

What do you think, what are the main effects of climate change? Which solutions can help to relieve its adverse impacts?

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?