The chart below shows the result of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK

The chart below shows the result of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The chart illustrates data on the reasons why UK students did not want to go to school based on the present studies.
Overall
, the majority of the student's
reason
Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
show examples
attributing to poor attendance in an institute is that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
both parents are working,
however
,
upbringing
Correct article usage
the upbringing
show examples
of the children is less likely to be the problem.
The attendance
Correct article usage
Attendance
show examples
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
university is an important aspect
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
children's learning and development. Most of the children said that they cannot be present
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
school because their parents are both working which accounts for almost half of the percentage, at around 40%. Another reason is that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
students nowadays have a lack of discipline
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
gathered
at
Change preposition
apply
show examples
25% of the respondents.
On the other hand
, both contributing factors
such
as bullying and pressure from the peer group has approximately 15% of the total tally. The
last
reason is that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
students felt that
upbringing
Correct article usage
the upbringing
show examples
of their parents and family may be a contributing factor which attributes
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
only 5%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: