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average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in London, Sydney and New york.

#temperatures #hours #sunshine #year #london #sydney #york
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From the graph, in
general we
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general, we
 can see average monthly temperatures in London, New
York
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, and Sydney. In London, from
january
the first month of the year; begins 10 days after the winter solstice
January
 to august
temperature
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 is slightly rising and going down from
august
the month following July and preceding September
August
 to
december
the last (12th) month of the year
December
.
Peak
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The peak
 of the London
temperature
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 is above 20
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degree
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degrees
 and below 25
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degree
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degrees
.
Lowest
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The low
The lowest
temperature
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 is 5
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degree
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degrees
. In New
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york
the English royal house (a branch of the Plantagenet line) that reigned from 1461 to 1485; its emblem was a white rose
York
, starting from
january
the first month of the year; begins 10 days after the winter solstice
January
 in 5
degree
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 to 30
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degree
Suggestion
degrees
 in
july
the month following June and preceding August
July
 is the rising part of
this
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 graph. As same as London, from
july
the month following June and preceding August
July
 to
december
the last (12th) month of the year
December
temperature
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 is going down to 5
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degree
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degrees
. In Sydney, the graph is slightly
fluctuational
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 other than 2 other cities. In
january
the first month of the year; begins 10 days after the winter solstice
January
,
sydney's
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Sydney's
temperature
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 is 25
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degree
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degrees
 and slightly going down to 15
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degree
Suggestion
degrees
 in
july
the month following June and preceding August
July
.
Then
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 in
july
the month following June and preceding August
July
 to
december
the last (12th) month of the year
December
temperature
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 is rising again to 25
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degree
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degrees
. From
table
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a table
tables
, comparing to Sydney and London, New
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york
the English royal house (a branch of the Plantagenet line) that reigned from 1461 to 1485; its emblem was a white rose
York
 is
the most sunny
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the sunniest
 city. New
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york's
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yorks'
Yorks'
 general hours of sunshine in per year is 2535. After New
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york
the English royal house (a branch of the Plantagenet line) that reigned from 1461 to 1485; its emblem was a white rose
York
, Sydney is the
second
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sunny
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sunniest
 city. In
last
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 London has 1180 hours in per year
.
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.
 In general, New
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york
the English royal house (a branch of the Plantagenet line) that reigned from 1461 to 1485; its emblem was a white rose
York
 is
the great
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the greatest
 city to visit if you're into dry sun and long sunny days.

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