In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?

The issue of children doing paid job is a complex and sensitive one. It is difficult to say whether children should work or not work. It depends on the conditions.
Firstly
, I will consider why
this
is wrong for parents of the future who is now a child.
Secondly
, I will explore if teenagers need a job, which reason and what they need a job during the time. Starting with, there are several reasons why kids ought not to work. In the beginning, employers may give big and complex jobs to do these little girls and boys that will make them feel imperfect. They will believe like they do not have adequate skills. The workload will be too much for them. Later, if bosses do not give their money, which they deserve, they do not wish to effort anymore.
For instance
, children may quit her/his studying thanks to pressure and injustice. After, working can give some benefits
such
as experience, communication skills, pocket money. In my opinion, these are more important than taking a high score for the exam.
For example
, a child without any working practice will demonstrate more issues to employ life,
however
, the one who had practice will adapt more quickly.
Furthermore
, youth should take their money and get accurate working condition standards that it is a necessity. In conclusion, It seems that children could have professional experience if the employer and school give them
this
opportunity and situations. I support these sort of activities as I did when I was a child.
Submitted by mervekoseblog on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
What to do next:
Look at other essays: