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Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

#computers #part #school #lessons
It is certainly true that computers are becoming increasingly popular in our education system
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Introducing
computer
 in schools aid better understanding of skills and easy
accesibilityof
the quality of being at hand when needed
accessibility
study but
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study, but
 there are
also
 some disadvantages
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,
too. On the one hand, one evident benefit is that
computer
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the computer
 helps students to improve their reasoning and logical skills. There are several applications available which make tough subject
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,
 including mathematics easier with using different visual and graphical tools.
For example
, Age of Empire is a
beneficial
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benefit
 in making complex concepts more understandable.
Secondly
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it is a boom for those students who live in remote areas because they can access these
lesson
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lessons
 online anywhere and anytime.These
smatt
showing mental alertness and calculation and resourcefulness
smart
 machines make courses easily accessible to everyone
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Recent study
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A recent study
 shows that there is an increase of 20% online students.
On the other hand
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there are obvious
disadvatages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
 of use of the
computer
 in schools.One issue is that it has brought
threat
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the threat
a threat
 to handwriting skills. Pupils do not bother about spelling and vocabulary because these machines
comes
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come
 with the
feauturs
a prominent attribute or aspect of something
features
 of
autocorrect
 which
automattically
in a reflex manner
automatically
 correct their
spellings
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spelling
 while writing. Another issue of
this
 trend is that loss of human interaction. Too much use of
computer
 subverted
students
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students'
student
student's
 interaction with their teachers.From recent study it is clearly seen that there is
reduction
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a reduction
 in the ratio of teachers per student as compared to the past. In conclusion
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while there
are
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is
plus point
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a plus point
the plus point
 of having computers in classes
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too much would be lost
as a result
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Maintaing
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Maintain
 handwriting skills and importance of teachers in class cannot be neglected in
holistic development
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the holistic development
 of
deciplines
a branch of knowledge
discipline
 in
classrom
a room in a school where lessons take place
classrooms
classroom
 to get attain
maximun
the greatest or most complete or best possible
maximum
 from class lessons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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