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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

#countries #parents #children #schools #people #life
Nowdays in
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Nowadays, in
Nowadays in
 some countries like
india pakistan
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India, Pakistan
india Pakistan
India Pakistan
India pakistan
 and some gulf countries parents like to send their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 to
single sex
Suggestion
a single sex school
school
 specially to girls.
due
Suggestion
Due
 their thinking or due to their culture
.
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.
but
Suggestion
But
 in
develped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 like
usa australia
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USA, Australia
usa Australia
USA Australia
USA australia
 china parents prefer to send their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 to
co educational
attended by members of both sexes
coeducational
school
.
Their
Suggestion
There
 are several
resons
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
 as
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 write above
its
the thing named or in question
it
 depends upon the thinking of parents.
in
Suggestion
In
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
their
in or at that place
there
 is some area or village where peoples are not well educated and they always
doupt
the state of being unsure of something
doubt
adopt
dumped
 on their
childrens specialy
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children, especially
childrens especially
children especially
children specialy
children's specialy
 on the girls they thought that if we send their girls to
co educational
Suggestion
Co educational
coeducational
do educational
school
 may
their
in or at that place
there
there there
 is chance that they fell in love with boys and choose them as a life partner are may do
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
 wrong in future from which they have to feel
ashame
feeling shame or guilt or embarrassment or remorse
ashamed
shame
.
Secondly due
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Secondly, due
 to security reasons of their girls
.
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.
in
Suggestion
In
such
 countries parents
not feel
Suggestion
don't feel
 safe to send their girls to
co educational
Suggestion
Co educational
coeducational
do educational
school
 because they always scare that if boys could do
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
 wrong with them like wrong comments
.
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.
 But in countries like
usa autralia
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USA, Australia
usa Australia
USA Australia
USA autralia
 parents are well
educated they
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educated, they
 love to send their girls or boys to
co educational
attended by members of both sexes
coeducational
school
.
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.
because
Suggestion
Because
 they thought that if boys and girls can study
together they
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together, they
 could learn more from each other and they could not
hasitate
pause or hold back in uncertainty or unwillingness
hesitate
 in
future
Suggestion
the future
 to talk with anyone. In conclusion
co education
education of men and women in the same institutions
coeducation
 is
much important student
Suggestion
a much important student
 can understand each other properly
.
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.
but as i mention due to illetracy parents send their children to single sex
school
 its harmfull for the children because they could feel shy in future

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