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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

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that
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“The
car
 has become an article of dress without which we feel uncertain, unclad, and incomplete”. From my perspective, the advantages of the
car
outstrip
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 its disadvantages. On the one hand, the disadvantages of the
car
 are only a few. The increase in pollution, traffic jams and accidents
are
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 the natural sequel to the burgeoning population of cars.
Moreover
, our overdependence on cars can lead to a decrease in practices
such
 as walking and cycling and
this
 has resulted in a number of diseases
such
 as obesity.
On the other hand
, I believe the advantages of a
car
 are more significant. The most important advantage is that it has given people freedom of movement. The ease of transportation which a
car
 brings is more than any other means of transportation.
For instance
, you can go from destination to destination and time is wasted waiting for the bus or train.
Therefore
, time and distance are not a barrier any more. What is more, families can go out together.
This
 becomes especially helpful when there are elderly or
the
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disabled and sick members in the family.
Furthermore
, the automobile industry provides jobs for millions of workers. Filling stations, restaurants, and other businesses that serve automobile
travelers
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 are of major importance to a country's economy.
In addition
, many developing nations have begun making automobiles to boost their economy.
That is
 why India has promoted many automobile manufacturing industries
such
 as Tata and Mahindra. On balance, the advantages to people's lives and the economic impact created by the
car
 definitely outweigh the disadvantages.
However
, we must know when and how much to use the
car
 so that we can minimize the demerits to some extent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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