‘Failure is proof that desire wasn’t strong enough’ To what extent do you agree with this statement?

We normally know that on the way to success there is no footprint of the lazy.
This
declaration leads to expression of
view
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the view
that the cause for not recording achievements is weak aspiration.
However
, opinions are divided as downfall is the learning process in life.
Thus
,
this
case
need
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needs
to be considered more. On the
first
hand, success is the problem, but failure is the formula. Being successful is not a piece of cake, so that it is reasonable that people have to learn, to experience and to fail many times before getting their results. We all might know that they took constant efforts, but they cannot understand their difficulties and every time they fail. After being faced with challenges, people gain knowledges, and they find out how to avoid risks and what is the effective way to overcome the circumstance. During that process, people keeping focus on their goals and paying courages to accomplish them would be the winner.
On the other hand
, many people decided to surrender after failing even troubles. There is no doubt that their intensity does not reach to the necessary extent.
Comparing
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Compared
to them, people getting over that completely pursue to their passion by their all exertion.
In other words
, their ambition is noticeably steady, that’s
reason
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the reason
why they are the champions. In conclusion, the grief does not demonstrate for the
enthusiasm
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enthusiastic
but being a loser after
all shows
Accept comma addition
all, shows
that we still can try more. Once we do that, we would achieve more in the future
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