children as a young as eight own a mobile phone . Nowadays the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

In the changing scenario technology is burgeoning with every passing

days

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day

. Average age children have their own cell

phone

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trend has more pessimistic rather than optimistic

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the upcoming paragraphs

. There are

number

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a number

of disadvantages of mobile

phone

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hand in

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early age children.

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of all, they

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donot

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do not

give full concentration on their study because when they start

study

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studying

internet

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the internet

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it show many

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advertisements

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children

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child's

mind is

distract

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distracted

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advertisement and they

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do not

complete their work

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they

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do not

gat

come into the possession of something concrete or abstract

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advertisement for some time after that learner

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does not give

do not give

full concentration on their work.

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that, kids fast plenty of health disorders because they spend their most of the time to playing games rather than playing outdoor games owing to

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they

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do not

become a healthy

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phone

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the main reason

a main reason

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wanting in physical strength

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eyesight and obesity and obesity is breeding grown of other serious health disorders

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Hence parents

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should not give a cell

phone

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to their children who are only eight

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years

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, mobile

phone

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is very helpful for those students who

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are using

have used

it a proper manners

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it in a proper manner

it a proper manner

. Pupil learning many skills due to search on

internet

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the internet

and they easily clear their doubts

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, cell

phone

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providers flood of opportunity like

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entertainment facility

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are watch

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are watching

have watched

watch

many videos on it and they

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do not

feel bored

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To conclude, everything is

blend

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a blend

of positive as well as negative.

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mobile

phone

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has

merits but

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merit, but

merit but

it puts detrimental effects on their health. Parents should give mobile

phone

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moture

help develop, help grow

nurture

children who are age 18 because they have

know

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known

about the how to use it and which information is right and wrong for them.

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children as a young as eight own a mobile phone . Nowadays the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

Some people prefer to live in rented homes rather than purchasing their own homes. Do you think advantages of living in rented house outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, in a number of countries, people can choose their children's schools between single-sex schools or double-sex schools. l personally believe that there are benefits of both single-sex schools and co-educational schools.

Some people think that living in big cities makes people have bad health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?