The diagram which illustrates processes of life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.

The diagram which illustrates processes of life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.
The diagram
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illustrates the processes of the life cycle of a species of large fish named the
salmon
.
The first step is
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the
salmon
start
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its
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life as
a
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egg under the reeds
approximately
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five to six months in an upper river with a slow movement. And
then
when they became
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fry with
measure
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between three and eight centimetres in length they are going to the lower river in a fast flowing approximately for 4 years.
Subsequently
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the fry became smooth and with a 12-15cm in length they reach during
this
time after which migrated to the open sea and there they habited about five years. After five years they reached
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the
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adult size
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means adult
salmon
from 70 to 76cm. In conclusion, the
salmon
passed through three areas and the process of becoming mature. Each
of
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habitat place takes place in
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a different
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aquatic
location
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