Some people think that art is essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is debated by some people that in school the most vital subject is art while in others’ think it is a waste of time. In
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essay, I will discuss both sides and give my opinion below. Let’s begin by looking at the benefits, in recent years the arts are being taught in educational locations because pupils need to be knowledgeable about our past life of ancestors, their ancient findings and own things.
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, the historical observatory and museum with findings of Mirza Ulugbek
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would be best for them.
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, these days school children are not educated because, teachers are overlooking
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they should be instructed a history of pottery and carpentry.
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, in my point of aspect pupils must be learned more exact and humanitarian subjects because with those sciences they can enter the university.
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, others think that children must not be educated with art subjects because it is not saving time.
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, nowadays school children are not interesting to art because they
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mathematical and physical examples at their leisure time. Following
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because they want to study in foreign countries with those certificates. At least, in my opinion as I said above that which is pupil want to learn, parents must not oppose to their idea. Overall, I personally trust that if parents hear their children it would be best. As our ancestors said that if you will do beneficial work, you will be rewarded.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • problem-solving
  • cultural awareness
  • tolerant society
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