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Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree

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Business
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 persons often reveal their thoughts that, having a distinct
product
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 is the key to achieve greater heights in the
business
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. I completely agree with the fact
that, today most
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that today, most
 of the businesses have grown because of their innovative ideas.
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 the growth of the
busniesses
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
 is depending on having evergreen
produts
commodities offered for sale
products
 and I would
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further discuss in
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further discuss
this
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eassay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 about the growth and advantages of
this
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businesses
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business
 which will have in their respective
business
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 segments. Today we are witnessing the most successful businesses growing
rapidly mostly
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rapidly, mostly
 because of having innovative products which have not existed in the
market
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 and
such
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 new products
always offers
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always offer
are always offering
 something new to the people which eventually creates a
market
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 share as sales pick up.
This
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 eventually sets the platform to grow the
business
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 which leads to increase in the profitability of the companies and at the same time the investors and
share holders
someone who holds shares of stock in a corporation
shareholders
 will be beneficial.
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, there is a fast moving consumer
product
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 called ‘Himalya’, a shampoo
product
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 which has a unique characteristics compared to other products
on
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in
 the same segment. During
this
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product
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 launch, The company ‘
Hindusthan
northern region of India where Hinduism predominates
Hindustan
 Unilever Limited’ management stated that,
this
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 special
product
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 is going to create a trend in the
market
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 and
its
it is
it's
 going to change
future
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the future
 of company in all aspects. Five years passed,
this
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product
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 is now penetrated all over the country and it conquered 80% of the
market
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share which
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share, which
 gave abundant profits and
mutibagger
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 returns to the company and shareholders. For any
business
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, a
quirkly
informal terms; strikingly unconventional
quirky
product
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 always will have a
competetive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
comparative
 advantage. When
business
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 has
this
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 kind of advantage, the businesses grow faster and the chances of achieving success in the
business
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 are very high because there is no
competetor
the contestant you hope to defeat
competitor
competitors
 who makes
similar
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a similar product
product
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. In
colclusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
calculation
, the
sceret
not open or public; kept private or not revealed
secret
 to achieve success in the
business
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 is to have a thought in mind to
comeup
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come up
 with
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product
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a product
products
 which
offeres
make available or accessible, provide or furnish
offers
offered
 something new to the people and which can create a trend.
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