In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Nowadays, it has detected a boost of the crime in many nations. Personally, I think the two main causes of

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drugs. Cocaine and

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murders

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if we choose the correct politics in the power. In my view, governments should try to control of the

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education for poor people. In conclusion, several nations have increased the numbers of crimes.

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and for the lack of opportunities that the system offer.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

263 words

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economic disparity
propensity
recidivism
deterrent
rehabilitative
judicial system
corruption
socioeconomic
alienation
stigmatization
decriminalization
enforcement
gentrification
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