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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London 2000-2010.
#data #earnings #three #bakeries #london
The graph illustrates
last
 ten
yearly
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years
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 in London three sort
product
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of product
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 increased shows. In
general
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,general
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this
 graph Buns level very slowly raising after coming down and residues, to
this
 including Sofia and Cake Lab upward go out. Buns in 2000 till 2005 slightly raising.After
in
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apply
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2005 till 2007 quietly come down,
between
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and between
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 2007 and 2010
fall
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fell
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 gradually. Sofia between 2000 and 2005 no change remain 2005 and 2007 go up minimally.After a climb dramatic increased cake lab two during the year, a rise moderate
afterward
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afterwards
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 a climb significant one plain stand steady
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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