The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London 2000-2010.

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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London 2000-2010.

Pop music is extremely popular around the world. Why do you think this genre of music is so popular worldwide? Discuss your thoughts and give details and examples to support your opinion.

Some people believe that schoolchildren should do their class work individually. Other people believe that sometimes class works should be done in small groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their hometown. What are the advantage and disadvantage of this.