e diagram below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the main information and make comparison where relevant.
The diagrams provide data on the process of the production of frozen
fish
pies from the industrial manufacture to the distribution.
At first glance, the first picture shows the main ingredients, namely peas, fish
, potatoes
and sauce, whereas
the second
chart reveals the step involved in the food preparation
, the quality control and then
the package of the products.
A closer inspection at the diagram highlights that the preparation
of potatoes
and fresh salmon follows two different pathways: in fact, whereas
the former can be processed within one month from the delivery date, the latter must be undertaken to the process in a by far shorter time, up to 12 hours. Also
, the potatoes
preparation
seems quite straightforward: firstly
, potatoes
are cleaned, peeled and chopped up into slices, then
they are boiled, chilled and, finally
they can be stored. Turning to the fish
preparation
, firstly
salmon is added with salt and lemon juice then
it is steamed in the oven. Afterwards, skin and bones are removed and put in the designated bin for the waste disposal, then
it is undertaken to the inspection stage for the quality control. Then
, peas, sauce and potatoes
are added to the fish
in the microwaveable container. Later, the product follows the final steps of packaging. Finally
, the items must be frozen to be stored and delivered for the distribution.Submitted by logoceciliabrogi on
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