e diagram below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the main information and make comparison where relevant.

e diagram below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the main information and make comparison where relevant.
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The diagrams provide data on the process of the production of frozen
fish
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pies from the industrial manufacture to the distribution. At first glance, the first picture shows the main ingredients, namely peas,
fish
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,
potatoes
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and sauce,
whereas
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the
second
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chart reveals the step involved in the food
preparation
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, the quality control and
then
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the package of the products. A closer inspection at the diagram highlights that the
preparation
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of
potatoes
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and fresh salmon follows two different pathways: in fact,
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the former can be processed within one month from the delivery date, the latter must be undertaken to the process in a by far shorter time, up to 12 hours.
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, the
potatoes
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preparation
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seems quite straightforward:
firstly
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,
potatoes
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are cleaned, peeled and chopped up into slices,
then
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they are boiled, chilled and,
finally
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they can be stored. Turning to the
fish
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preparation
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,
firstly
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salmon is added with salt and lemon juice
then
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it is steamed in the oven. Afterwards, skin and bones are removed and put in the designated bin for the waste disposal,
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it is undertaken to the inspection stage for the quality control.
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, peas, sauce and
potatoes
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are added to the
fish
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in the microwaveable container. Later, the product follows the final steps of packaging.
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, the items must be frozen to be stored and delivered for the distribution.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, firstly, whereas".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, potatoes, preparation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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