Some people think that children should learn how to compete but others think that children should be taught to cooperate to become more useful adults. Express some reasons for both views and give your own opinions.

Recently the children have the
competition
of
life
and they
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some people) think it is the only way for the
success but
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success, but
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
opine that they have to learn how they become useful for the co-operative society. Both the views elaborated
further
with my opinion.
To begin
with, the
competition
is the most significant factor in the schools. They have so many competitions in all
fileds
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
fields
such
as science
,
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,
arts and so on. The prime
advanatge
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
is they bring their hidden talents
also
they understand how to improve their skill to develop more.
Also they
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Also, they
can get to know about their weakness due to
this
they can correct it.
Moreover
,
competition
motivates them to achieve their
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
goals like getting
job
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a job
the job
jobs
in one of
the most biggest
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the biggest
MNC company and they become more mature rapidly.
As a result
, it
ease
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eases
the companies to choose the qualified candidates as per the
requiremnts
required activity
requirements
requirement
.
Furthermore
,
competition
are
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is
the boost to earn the own abilities to develop their
inter personal
occurring among or involving several people
interpersonal
skill. On the flip side, there is one of the main
reason
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reasons
is teamwork. They understand how to manage the
gruop
any number of entities (members) considered as a unit
group
of people as to hear their everyone idea. Because of
this
leadership skill they reach their position
high
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higher
.
Furthermore
to
beccome
enter or assume a certain state or condition
become
a
socialogist
a social scientist who studies the institutions and development of human society
sociologist
person is very important
such
as to do something for society is
best
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the best
the good
thing.
For instance
, today's generation have
to be learn
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to learn
learned
learnt
sharing and caring nature for
protect
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protecting
every one's
life
.
Addtionaly
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Additionally
, they learn to
being
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be
a good human being in the hectic
life
. To conclude, my opinion is that, the
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
compassion
compression
is always in
everyones
life
but being a human being in
this
corporate
wolrd
everything that exists anywhere
world
become more useful for the society and all around us is very
imporatant
of great significance or value
important
to learn.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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