Today many parents force rhier children to study all kinds of courses in the early age . What are the reason behind this.? What effects do you think this practice would bring to gbs children?

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According to
modern era
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the modern era
, everything is changing day by day.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
, parents are forced
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children to select difficult courses. They
can not
can not
cannot
give the chance to
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children
for
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to
show
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situation in the following paragraphs.
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, parents are forced
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of them or themselves
their
tier
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children to accept difficult courses during
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thier
of them or themselves
their
studies. There are ample reasons of
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problem.
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of all, they become
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of them or themselves
their
children superior as compared to other
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
.
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, they will
nurturing
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nurture
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thier
of them or themselves
their
children for defeat in
compitative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
era. Because, In
this
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era,
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a Fully knowledgeable person
Fully knowledgeable people
can be survived. Apart from that,
parenfs
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parents
do these
this
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for
betterment
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the betterment
of
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of them or themselves
their
children
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child's
children's
future.
On the contrary
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, there are many bad effects proved of these things
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Like, children lose
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of them or themselves
their
creativity from
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of them or themselves
their
there
mind
.
Accept space
.
They become a part of
rat race
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the rat race
.
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to
this
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, every child is born with
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of them or themselves
their
own talent. They forget
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of them or themselves
their
there
hidden talent which proved bad for
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us
as well as
world
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the world
.
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, they will not co-
operatd
direct or control; projects, businesses, etc.
operate
with others. Because, they could not interact with
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
type of people during
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thier
of them or themselves
their
difficult studies.
However
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, it
put
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puts
bad impact
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a bad impact
on the development of the child. Parents put
lot
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lots
of weight of study on the tender age of the child.. In the conclusion, parents should not force
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thier
of them or themselves
their
children to select their courses.They should give chance to fly in the whole world. It
will proved
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will prove
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for the future of the children.
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