Today, TV channels provide men’s sport shows more than women’s sport shows. Why? Should TV channels give equal time for women’s sport and men’s sport?
Over the years, gender equality on
Television-
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Sports
sports
networks Use synonyms
have
been imbalanced. I believe Change the verb form
has
this
trend has its own reasons; Linking Words
however
, I strongly believe that female Linking Words
athletics
should be given more broadcasting time.
Replace the word
athletes
Although
gender equality has come a long way, including UNESCO’s recognition of sport and physical activities as a human right in 1978, Linking Words
the
gender equality in Correct article usage
apply
sports
still has not come far enough, especially in TV productions. In my opinion, there are two main reasons leading to Use synonyms
this
issue. First of all, Linking Words
male’s
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male
sports
always get more attention from the audience; Use synonyms
therefore
, TV producers have a wider strategy to display men’s games on their channels. Linking Words
Accordingly
, these programs earned more media coverage and sponsorship dollars. Linking Words
Secondly
, some people have an argument that “Linking Words
women’s
Use synonyms
sports
are not interesting enough.” Even though the popularity of Use synonyms
women’s
Use synonyms
sports
is growing, some still believe that “No matter how toughened a sportswoman may be, her organism is not cut out to sustain certain shocks.” Take Use synonyms
last
July’s Linking Words
Women’s
World Cup soccer final Use synonyms
for example
. It was the most watched soccer Linking Words
matches
—men’s or Correct subject-verb agreement
match
women’s
—EVER in the US with nearly 25.4 million viewers. Yet the players were far less compensated than their male counterparts
Use synonyms
However
, I would like to mention two reasons why we should give more attention towards Linking Words
women’s
Use synonyms
sport show
. Fix the agreement mistake
sports shows
Firstly
, the more women figures playing Linking Words
sports
, the more female audiences get inspired and practice exercises regularly. It could Use synonyms
bring
a long-term effect on Verb problem
have
women’s
health and contribute to a healthy lifestyle in the community. Use synonyms
Secondly
, everyone should be given the same Linking Words
chances
to be whatever they want to be. There should be no disparity in Fix the agreement mistake
chance
sports
, nor in the workplace, nor in life. Genders should not be the thing to Use synonyms
define
us or Wrong verb form
defines
inhibit
us from performing our talents.
In conclusion, the dominance of men’s athletics on television has been economically beneficial for the show producers and well-fulfilled the demand of the mass viewers. Correct subject-verb agreement
inhibits
Thus
, for the long-term development of a healthy lifestyle and equal Linking Words
right
for both genders, the producers need to arrange a Fix the agreement mistake
rights
balance
broadcasting schedule for both genders.Replace the word
balanced
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