Today, TV channels provide men’s sport shows more than women’s sport shows. Why? Should TV channels give equal time for women’s sport and men’s sport?

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Over the years, gender equality on
Television-
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Sports
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sports
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networks
have
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been imbalanced. I believe
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trend has its own reasons;
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, I strongly believe that female
athletics
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athletes
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should be given more broadcasting time.
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gender equality has come a long way, including UNESCO’s recognition of sport and physical activities as a human right in 1978,
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gender equality in
sports
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still has not come far enough, especially in TV productions. In my opinion, there are two main reasons leading to
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issue. First of all,
male’s
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male
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sports
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always get more attention from the audience;
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, TV producers have a wider strategy to display men’s games on their channels.
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, these programs earned more media coverage and sponsorship dollars.
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, some people have an argument that “
women’s
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sports
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are not interesting enough.” Even though the popularity of
women’s
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sports
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is growing, some still believe that “No matter how toughened a sportswoman may be, her organism is not cut out to sustain certain shocks.” Take
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July’s
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World Cup soccer final
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. It was the most watched soccer
matches
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—men’s or
women’s
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—EVER in the US with nearly 25.4 million viewers. Yet the players were far less compensated than their male counterparts
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, I would like to mention two reasons why we should give more attention towards
women’s
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sport show
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sports shows
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.
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, the more women figures playing
sports
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, the more female audiences get inspired and practice exercises regularly. It could
bring
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a long-term effect on
women’s
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health and contribute to a healthy lifestyle in the community.
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, everyone should be given the same
chances
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to be whatever they want to be. There should be no disparity in
sports
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, nor in the workplace, nor in life. Genders should not be the thing to
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us or
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inhibits
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us from performing our talents. In conclusion, the dominance of men’s athletics on television has been economically beneficial for the show producers and well-fulfilled the demand of the mass viewers.
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, for the long-term development of a healthy lifestyle and equal
right
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for both genders, the producers need to arrange a
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broadcasting schedule for both genders.
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