Today, TV channels provide men’s sport shows more than women’s sport shows. Why? Should TV channels give equal time for women’s sport and men’s sport?
Over the years, gender equality on
Television-
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Sports
sports
networks have
been imbalanced. I believe Change the verb form
has
this
trend has its own reasons; however
, I strongly believe that female athletics
should be given more broadcasting time.
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athletes
Although
gender equality has come a long way, including UNESCO’s recognition of sport and physical activities as a human right in 1978, the
gender equality in Correct article usage
apply
sports
still has not come far enough, especially in TV productions. In my opinion, there are two main reasons leading to this
issue. First of all, male’s
Change noun form
male
sports
always get more attention from the audience; therefore
, TV producers have a wider strategy to display men’s games on their channels. Accordingly
, these programs earned more media coverage and sponsorship dollars. Secondly
, some people have an argument that “women’s
sports
are not interesting enough.” Even though the popularity of women’s
sports
is growing, some still believe that “No matter how toughened a sportswoman may be, her organism is not cut out to sustain certain shocks.” Take last
July’s Women’s
World Cup soccer final for example
. It was the most watched soccer matches
—men’s or Correct subject-verb agreement
match
women’s
—EVER in the US with nearly 25.4 million viewers. Yet the players were far less compensated than their male counterparts
However
, I would like to mention two reasons why we should give more attention towards women’s
sport show
. Fix the agreement mistake
sports shows
Firstly
, the more women figures playing sports
, the more female audiences get inspired and practice exercises regularly. It could bring
a long-term effect on Verb problem
have
women’s
health and contribute to a healthy lifestyle in the community. Secondly
, everyone should be given the same chances
to be whatever they want to be. There should be no disparity in Fix the agreement mistake
chance
sports
, nor in the workplace, nor in life. Genders should not be the thing to define
us or Wrong verb form
defines
inhibit
us from performing our talents.
In conclusion, the dominance of men’s athletics on television has been economically beneficial for the show producers and well-fulfilled the demand of the mass viewers. Correct subject-verb agreement
inhibits
Thus
, for the long-term development of a healthy lifestyle and equal right
for both genders, the producers need to arrange a Fix the agreement mistake
rights
balance
broadcasting schedule for both genders.Replace the word
balanced
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