Some people think that school uniforms should be abolished in all schools.

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Some people believe that
school
regular uniforms should be cancelled in all academy's. Personally, I strongly disagree with the given idea because
school
uniforms cannot be cancelled.
To begin
with,
school
uniforms are playing big role in our society. Because, It is divided
school
boys and girls from university and college students. In every sphere of jobs we have special uniforms or dress codes. As an example: our society do special and regular uniforms for the boys and girls which can be suitable and normal for
schools
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school
school's
principles too.
Also
, I wear
such
kind of beautiful and
stunningly
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stunning
attractive suit with
tie
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a tie
when I was a schoolboy. Even though, I disagree with
school
uniform
cannot be cancelled because they have many advantages than
disadventages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
. With respect to uniforms are
total
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totally
necessary to build real educational atmosphere. The
school
uniform
also
helps to pupils
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helps pupils
to rise academically performer. Other people believe that
school
special
uniform
should be cancelled. Because, they are taking much time to wear it in the morning. And some parents claim that wearing
tie
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a tie
and suit should be
exploit
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exploited
from the
schoolchilds
a young person attending school (up through senior high school)
schoolchildren
.
Although
, they want to wear their children in free clothes as it is much
more better
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better
to feel
comfortable themselves
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themselves comfortable
. It is blatantly obvious if our government permits them or cancelled
school
uniforms our study system can
lost
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lose
quality
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the quality
of education. To sum up,
school
uniforms should not be cancelled in schools. Because, it can influence in study system too. I am hundred percent sure that
schoolchilds
a young person attending school (up through senior high school)
schoolchildren
should wear
uniform it
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a uniform, it
a uniform it
is more beautiful and more attractive of
schoolchilds
a young person attending school (up through senior high school)
schoolchildren
.

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