The workplace nowadays is trying to employ the equal number of females and males. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Companies often prefer to hire the same amount of
employees
from both sexes. I completely disagree with the statement, and I think that keeping an equal
number
of male & female
workers
impacts badly on the development of a
company
. First of all, the Policy of identical quantity of genders puts a question mark on the selection system of a
company
. To maintain the similar ratio of men and women it is often found that the qualification of a qualified candidate is overlooked.
This
results in hiring less suitable labour, which creates an adverse effect on the development of a
company
.
Moreover
, because of underqualified
workers
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the
overall
environment of the office loses its colour and joy.
For example
, selecting the wrong candidate makes discrimination between
employees
, as both have differences in qualifications but receive the same Salary.
Secondly
, sometimes extra
employees
are hired, to keep the similarity in the
number
of males and females.
This
is a direct loss for the
company
. Even if the same work can be performed by a smaller
number
of
workers
to match the counterparts additional
employees
are recruited.
Furthermore
,
some
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jobs which
is
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only suitable for a particular gender, there inclusion of other genders does not make any positive result.
For instance
, food delivery. Jobs are suitable only for males, but companies are hiring female candidates for food delivery which is slowing down the
overall
delivery process of food, because of
such
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To conclude
, I strongly disagree with the tendency of
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same
number
of male and female
workers
in the office because it creates doubt over the recruitment process and extra cost for the
company
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