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Some people think that nuclear is better than other source of power for meeting ever - increasing global needs. To what extent do you agree?

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It is a fact that nuclear strength can produce more
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 than other
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 sources to meet the world's stamina requirements. From my perspective,
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 it has been acknowledged as one of the most important vital sources, which can match the increasing
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 demands, renewable resources
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 as the Sun might be a better option.
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 with, why I believe that nuclear is a good choice, the amount of
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that is
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 brought out from a nuclear plant is magnificently more than other alternatives,
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 as water dams. What I mean by
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 is that the stamina arising from a nuclear plant is approximately ten times stronger than an average dam can produce. To
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 with an instance, I can state that Turkey has over 70 dams, yet these are merely as powerful as seven nuclear plants;
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, construction of seven nuclear plants could cost cheaper in the country.
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, nuclear
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 would be a better choice than dams when it is considered from financial and
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 perspectives. Moving onto the reason why I claim the Sun is possibly a better option than nuclear, it is a renewable
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 source, which is not only harmless but
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 endless and more powerful.
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, the
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 is offered by the star is better than any other alternatives. To illustrate, the amount of sun light that touches on the earth's surface for a minute is adequate to meet the whole world's two years of
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 need.
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, as soon as technological advancements can benefit from the Sun more effectively, humankind will not need another source anymore. All in all, taking the aforementioned points into account, it can be concluded that
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 nuclear is a better option than available alternatives, the Sun will be able to provide the best
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 source in near future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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