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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-lebelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-lebelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The tables illustrate the amount of money spent on
Fairtrade
coffee
 and
bananas
 from 1999 to 2004 in five separate
countries
:
UK
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the UK
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, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium,
Sweden
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and Sweden
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.
Overall
, the
sales
 of
Fairtrade
coffee
 rose in all five
countries
,
while
 there were three out of five
countries
 went
up
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the money spent on
Fairtrade
bananas
 in two years.
Additionally
,
UK
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the UK
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 saw by far the highest levels of spending on the two products. In 1999, Switzerland had the highest
sales
 of
Fairtrade
coffee
, at 3
millions
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million
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of
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euros
,
while
 the highest
sales
 of
Fairtrade
bananas
 were in the
UK
, at 15
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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euros
. By 2004,
UK
's
Fairtrade
coffee
 strikingly grow to 20
million
of
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apply
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euros
, over three times
sales
 in Switzerland.
Furthermore
, there was a surge in
UK's
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the UK's
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Fairtrade
bananas
 in 2004, from 15
million
of
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euros
 to 47
million
of
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euros
 in 1999 and 2004 respectively.
Sales
 of two
Fairtrade
 products were far lower in Denmark, Belgium,
Sweden
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and Sweden
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.
Small
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A small
The small
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 increase in
sales
 of
Fairtrade
coffee
 can be seen, but revenue remained at 2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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euros
 or below in all three
countries
 in both years.
Finally
, it is remarkable that the
sales
in
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of
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Fairtrade
bananas
 went down to 1 and 0.9
million
of
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euros
 in Belgium and Sweden respectively.
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