IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Universities should accept numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some professionals are well-paid in
few
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a few
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countires
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countries
.
While
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 some argue that
this
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 is beneficial for a country, Others believe that
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government
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the government
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 ought to
restirct
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restrict
 the amount paid to
employees
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the
arguments
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argument
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 and support the former view with relevant examples. On the one hand, Those who believe that limiting
salaries
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 by
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government
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the government
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 is
neccessary
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necessary
 because
this
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 will curtail other
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employees
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employees'
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 success.
This
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due to
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unfair
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an unfair
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paying
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pay
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 system, which demotivates other
employees
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 at
work place
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workplace
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.
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, If two
employees
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 with
same
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the same
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 credentials
working
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work
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 in
a
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the
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 same field and are not paid equally,
then
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 one
have
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has
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 to face hurdles in his career growth which is completely injustice
within
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among
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employees
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.
Therefore
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,
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government
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the government
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 must impose
such
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limitation
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limitations
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to
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on
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employees
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employees'
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salaries
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 in order to avoid any
discrimation
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discrimination
.
On the other hand
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, my view is that
employees
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 who earn immensely high
salaries
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 can boost the
countries
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country's
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 economy.
This
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 happens when
employee
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employees
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 become a high tax payer to the
government
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, which will have a great contribution towards development.
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, If
high earning
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high-earning
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 professional
pays
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pay
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 the tax on time,
then
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this
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 money can be
utlize
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utilised
 towards under
previlleged
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privileged
 people in terms of health care and education.
As a result
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,
such
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 payments will
turn-out
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turn out
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 to be profitable to the
countries
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country's
countries'
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 progress. In conclusion,
Although
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 some
belive
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believe
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 that
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government
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the government
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 should put
limitation
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a limitation
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 on
salaries
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 as it
decline
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declines
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 the
sucess
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success
 of other
employees
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, I believe that
employees
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 with extremely high
salaries
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 can be
benefical
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beneficial
 to the
government
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 because they pay taxes.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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