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Some people think that the best way to reduce the crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe that there are better alternatives of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, every time we surf the net or watch recent news on TV we often learn about committing different kinds of crimes.
This
 means that it is already a common thing for us to see an increase in the number of crimes. And seeing all of these, some people believe that the most efficient method to decrease the
crime
 is to imprison criminals for longer periods.
However
, others stick
on
Suggestion
to
with
 the
opinion
 that there are superior models of diminishing the rate of offences. I partly agree with the latter idea and in
this
 essay I will support my
opinion
 with examples.
Initially
, looking back to
sources
Suggestion
the sources
 and reasons of any crimes, we can notice one thing that every person’s criminal
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 forms in the family and school life conditions. If children are morally educated well in the family and school, they are less likely to do any offence in the future.
Furthermore
, police can achieve better result in reducing
crime
 by giving some explanations to the teachers about the children’s probability of committing
crime
.
This
 may lead policemen to obtaining
reduction
Suggestion
a reduction
 in the number of would be criminals too.
Secondly
, the reason why I disagree with the
opinion
 of a
prison
 as the most efficient way is that, it is unfair to use
this
 kind of punishment for some minor crimes. Take shoplifters for an example, they may be punished by using costly fines for their petty crimes like fraud and theft, or they
also
 can be used in community services
instead
. In
this
 case,
prison
 can be an option if the
crime
 is more serious or criminals pose a threat to society.
For instance
, murders and terrorists should be imprisoned to ensure the safety of other citizens.
On the other hand
, there is an argument that the aim of prisons is rehabilitation. In some jails offenders may receive
education
Suggestion
an education
 and have enough time to think carefully about what they had done when they were a criminal in freedom.
As a result
, they may never re-offend
crime
. In conclusion, Even though there is a common believe that
prison
 is the most powerful way to lessen the
crime
, In my
opinion
, there are
also
 other types of methods
such
 as improving the work of police and applying costly fines. Eventually, I think
prison
 should be a punishment for hazardous crimes and offences.

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