The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

It is true that people are judged based on their social dignity and personal wealth nowadays, and traditional values
such
as integrity and honesty are being forgotten. To a certain extent, I would agree with the fact that people are valued based on their wealth and status these days, but I
also
believe that old fashioned values still play an important part in our society It is believed that we are living in the pop culture and the materialistic era these days, as the public judge each individual based on his/her social status and wealth. It can be seen from how celebrities become famous nowadays. Many celebrities have been popular because of their physical appearance and
such Kim Kardashian
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the such Kim Kardashian
. Her reality television program never shows any world class acting quality, but only shows about her luxurious mansions and fancy cars. And
then
there are other celebrities who are well known due to his/her social dignity as the son or the daughter of a wealthy family. One of the examples would be Paris Hilton. Indeed, she has many bad attitudes, she is still popular because she inherits the assets of her parents.
Although
traditional values
such
as respect others, being responsible, honesty and integrity seem to be forgotten nowadays, but they still play an important part in many communities. In common cases, employers are still assessing their potential employees based their hard working attitude, positive behaviour and their integrity. And
then
business people are still looking for business partners who are reliable, can be trusted, and dependable.
Therefore
, it is important for adults to educate their children about these positive values because they still play an essential part in the societies.
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