The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

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It is true that people are judged based on their social dignity and personal wealth nowadays, and traditional values

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as integrity and honesty are being forgotten. To a certain extent, I would agree with the fact that people are valued based on their wealth and status these days, but I

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believe that old fashioned values still play an important part in our society It is believed that we are living in the pop culture and the materialistic era these days, as the public judge each individual based on his/her social status and wealth. It can be seen from how celebrities become famous nowadays. Many celebrities have been popular because of their physical appearance and

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such Kim Kardashian

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the such Kim Kardashian

. Her reality television program never shows any world class acting quality, but only shows about her luxurious mansions and fancy cars. And

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there are other celebrities who are well known due to his/her social dignity as the son or the daughter of a wealthy family. One of the examples would be Paris Hilton. Indeed, she has many bad attitudes, she is still popular because she inherits the assets of her parents.

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traditional values

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as respect others, being responsible, honesty and integrity seem to be forgotten nowadays, but they still play an important part in many communities. In common cases, employers are still assessing their potential employees based their hard working attitude, positive behaviour and their integrity. And

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business people are still looking for business partners who are reliable, can be trusted, and dependable.

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, it is important for adults to educate their children about these positive values because they still play an essential part in the societies.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

280 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial literacy
budgeting
savings
investing
tax obligations
retirement planning
loans
credit
interest rates
crowded curricula
traditional academic subjects
real-life experiences
parental guidance
practical
intellectually rigorous
school syllabus
gig economy
income-streams
challenging
trained teachers
specialized field

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The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build houses in the styles of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The use of social media such as Facebook or Twitter is replacing face-to-face contact this century. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Are classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?