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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on individually and on society?

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People in many nations around the world have been suffering from sleep deprivation. There has been a dramatic decline in the quantity of sleep for two main reasons.
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, the main reason is that stress from work or family prevents people from having a sufficient amount of sleep. In fact, people who find their mind wandering or worrying about deadlines at their workplace or family conflicts usually struggle to fall sleep within an hour after going to bed, reducing significantly the
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 time. Another factor is that people nowadays tend to consume more caffeine or alcohol, which make them susceptible to sleep deprivation. By taking in too much of these substances, sleep is more likely to elude them even though they are exhausted after a long day at work. The decline in sleep quantity is detrimental to both individuals and their society.
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, the physical health of people who don't get adequate sleep may deteriorate severely in the long run, regardless of their age. In fact, if they fail to sleep seven or eight hours each night over a period of more than two months, their immune system will be weakened
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 contributes to poor productivity, affecting negatively to the development of each society. Since tiredness caused by the lack of sleep can disturb people’s ability to focus, it seriously hampers people’s performance at work. In conclusion, stress and substances like alcohol and caffeine are major causes of sleep deprivation and that brings about devastating effects on both people’s health and the growth of society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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