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Some people think that they can be fit by going to the gym, while others think that there are other better ways to remain fit. Discuss both views along with your opinion.

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There are those who think going to the
gym
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 is the best
way
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 to stay in shape
while
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 others disagree. In
this
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 essay, I am going to examine both points of view and
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 give my perspective on the matter. On one side of the argument, there are
people
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 who believe the benefits of exercising at the
gym
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 considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
this
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 is that trainers working in gyms are specialists in bodybuilding; they know the most effective
way
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 to make a beautiful body shape in the short term. It is
also
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 possible to say that gyms have
every
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apply
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equipment
that is
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 prepared for the individuals’ purposes. A good illustration of
this
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 is when professional wrestlers need to be fit and pumped they always go to the
gym
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 to use numerous exercise machines.
On the other hand
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, it is
also
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 possible to make
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 opposing case. It is often argued that in fact, nowadays YouTubers are replacing gyms by introducing an enormous number of home exercises.
People
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 often
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this
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have this
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 opinion because they believe that so many former or present movie stars are instructing viewers
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 many channels. A second point is that actually, doing cardio exercises
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 as running or cycling is
way
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 more essential to be thinner; so many healthy
people
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have
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who have
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 gorgeous bodies would run or ride a bicycle on
the
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a
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 daily basis. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
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, I feel that going to the
gym
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 to be fit is the best-suited
way
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 for me because there are exemplary and qualified trainers, and even athletes go to the
gym
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 to use a lot of
exercising
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exercise
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 equipment. Given
this
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 situation, it is recommended for
people
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 to have a spirit, go to the
gym
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 regularly, and make a good
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relationship
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with trainers.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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