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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Wild animals are losing their habitats, which is occupied by the increasing number of human beings. Some people supported that government should invest money in protecting endangered animals, it would help to keep those priceless biological genes.
However
, some people believe protect wild animals is a waste of public money because no place for them to live. I am of the opinion that protecting wild animals has more benefits than drawbacks. Animals are more important part of the ecological system and a world with various genes is more livable and healthy for human.
First
 of all, as we all know, wild animals have an irreplaceable role in preserving and regulating the field environment quality though the food chain. Without wild animals, the forests will be attacked by pest and reproductive problems which is caused by no birds spreading pollen.
Besides
, the genes carried by wild animals have a potential use that might help or even save our human beings in the future.
For instance
, scientists have found that the immunity of domesticated cows can be improved by replacing the certain gene with the corresponding gene of wild cows. 　　To sum up, I believe that wildlife protection will bring far more gains than losses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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